IELTS Academic writing task 2 : Sample 05

Argumentative

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

write about the following topic:

Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children do you agree or disagree?

Write at least 250 words

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By Muhammad Ayaz Aslam

Response 1

By the advent of this century, computer technology has reshaped our daily lives; 'children' is the stratum of society who were most negatively affected by this development. In my perspective, the argument that the disadvantages of information technology outweigh its advantages sounds more valid when it is observed in context to the said group of people.

These days, a huge majority of computer users, especially children, who remain deeply immersed in playing video games, doing their academic tasks and other activities such as, spending their time on social sites (Facebook, Twitter etc.) They are considered more vulnerable to the harmful effects of electronic devices than adults, as they are using this at the of their health. By considering the advantages of this, one cannot fully abandon the usage because, in running days, its utility is inevitable in every walk of life.

Like many other human discoveries, a computer brings copious benefits to the modern world. Now, it is being considered a cog in modern scientific development, but, on the same page, it overshadows many other important aspects of life - social and physical activities are pushed aside - which are proved very important in the physical, a social and mental growth of a child. Instead of learning from the company of their parents, they constantly remain involved in playing electronic games. This attitude severely affects the learning of moral and social values. Their disinterest in physical games is another factor that magnifies the harmful effects of computer usage. Such effects can be subsided if the usage remains restricted.

At this age group, the consciences of children are not yet fully developed, so it is highly recommended for parents and teachers to intervene to stop their children from being damaged by the overuse of computers.

Response 2

I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day. This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long can be damaging to both the eyes and the physical posture of a young child, regardless of what they are using the computer for.

However, the main concern is the type of computer activities that attract children. These are often electronic games that tend to be very intense and rather violent. The player is usually the ‘hero’ of the game and too much exposure can encourage children to be self-centered and insensitive to others.

Even when children use a computer for other purposes, such as getting information or emailing friends, it is no substitute for human interaction. Spending time with other children and sharing non-virtual experiences is an important part of a child’s development that cannot be provided by a computer.

In spite of this, the obvious benefits of computer skills for young children cannot be denied. Their adult world will be changing constantly in terms of technology, and the internet is the key to all the knowledge and information available in the world today. Therefore, it is important that children learn at an early age to use the equipment enthusiastically and with confidence as they will need these skills throughout their studies and working lives.

I think the main point is to make sure that young children do not overuse computers. Parents must ensure that their children learn to enjoy other kinds of activities and not simply sit at home, learning to live in a virtual world.

Reference: Book 6, Test GT B, Writing Task 2 Examiner Response (9 bands)