IELTS Writing Task 2 : Sample 12

What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

One important stage in a child’s growth is certainly the development of a conscience, which is linked to the ability to tell right from wrong. This skill comes with time and good parenting, and my firm conviction is that punishment does not have much of a role to play in this. Therefore I have to disagree almost entirely with the given statement.

To some extent, the question depends on the age of the child.To punish a very young child is both wrong and foolish, as an infant will not understand what is happening or why he or she is being punished. Once the age of reason is reached, however, a child can be rewarded for good behaviour and discouraged from bad. This kind but the firm approach will achieve more than harsh punishments, which might entail many negative consequences unintended by parents.

To help a child learn the difference between right and wrong teachers and parents should first provide good role modelling in their own behavior. After that, if sanctions are needed, the punishment should not be of a physical nature, as that merely sends the message that it is acceptable for larger people to hit smaller ones an outcome which may well result in the child starting to bully others. Nor should the punishment be in any way cruel.

Rather, teachers and parents can use a variety of methods to discipline their young charges, such as detention, withdrawal of privileges, and time-out. Making the punishment fit the crime is a useful notion, which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti they have drawn, or apologize to someone they have hurt. In these ways, responsibility is developed in the child, which leads to much better future behaviour than does punishment.

Some vocabulary words and good expression:

• The development of conscience

• Therefore I have to disagree almost entirely with the given statement.

• Which might entail many negative consequences unintended by parents

• Starting to bully others

Some Complex Sentences

• Making the punishment fit the crime is a useful notion, which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti they have drawn, or apologize to someone they have hurt.

• After that, if sanctions are needed, the punishment should not be of a physical nature, as that merely sends the message that it is acceptable for larger people to hit smaller ones an outcome which may well result in the child starting to bully others.

Reference: Book 10 Test 1 Task 2 (Examiner Response)